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By : GraycefulChaos

From ANON - Frankenmuth on March 24, 2004
Yay! Will is fighting that erm...what is that other voice? Evil Will? Well who/whatever it is I'm glad he's fighting it...

Don't worry about the link...the comic is about 3(?) years long or something like that...and you'll be happy when you do get around to it.

Write more, please, I wanna know what happens...(I fear Will killing himself...I've read some stories where he does *tear*)
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From ANON - seraphina on March 23, 2004
oh, and just another thing, i have been known to cry out randomly 'I wish i were a gay man' so you're right, you'r not alone. *grabs grayceful, her elven-eyes, will, jack and anyone else who is of the same mind and drags them off to a gay bar*...for research pruposes of course...remind me to take my painkillers only as precribed!!!
Oh and reading back on the chapter again...WIll's not gonna off himself is he the the ending IS gonna be happy isn't it??? *whimpers* have been reading an interesting book on self harm though...made me thing of your Will...that is all...you know i love your stuff already!!!!
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From ANON - seraphina on March 23, 2004
oh oh oh oh!!!! beautiful!!!!! Does that mean that he can't hear the humming when he's with Jack in 'that' way? Is the voice in his head silenced by this?!!! Pleae say yes!!!! they're so wonderful together...look at me...they make me go all fangirl!Seraph...BLOODY HELL. Sorta like Will's coming outa the blackness and seeing some grey hues or something. Hope Jack can help him...hope Jack DOES help him. Hope you also got my email with the addresses for other forums. more soon please!!!!
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From ANON - Datiye on March 23, 2004
Here's some more reveiw flavored nourishment for you! You are exactly correct about the shared sentiment of being a gay man. Mine is slightly more strange though sin hav have actually dated several gay men. Poor me. I need to pay more attention to my gaydar. But anyways, great chapter. Will and Jack kissage and naughty rubbing. Yay! Things are seeming to get better. I suppose I won't know if you're tricking me until you post the next chapter. I garentee you I will like it even if it was a trick. Hopefully things will work out for them. 'till next time!
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From ANON - Frankenmuth on March 22, 2004
I like this story. Have I told you that? I can't remember.

I like how Will talks to himself, and how worried Jack is.

A I t I total agree with you about wanting to be a guy so I could be gay...*meh* I guess I'm not so weird. Oh, and I agree that the sexiest couple would be two guys.
You should read Boy Meets Boy (it's a finished web comic on keenspot * http://boymeetsboy.keenspot.com/d/20000922.html *) Go check it out...it's sweet.

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From ANON - Datiye on March 19, 2004
Yay! More updates! SOOOOO COOL! If you want to post on another website try mediaminer.org. It's a pretty good spot even it decides not to work every now and then. (What can I say, it's the internet) Anywayz... as I was starting to say, great chapter. So, does Will offically have a pesky voice in his head now? Sucks for him. The voices always get you in trouble and when you try to blame them ( to outside parties ) then people say your crazy. Or you are crazy. Is it the same thing? I think it might be. Okay, I've started to ramble. Time to slowly back away from the keyboard.....
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From ANON - roxie on March 18, 2004
well, now i feel just horrible for not updating recently. but, what's done is done. last chaper i wanted to say that i was thrilled that will stood up to the voice in his head (that must be difficult, seriously). and this chapter the conversation he had aloud with himself was hilarious, i'm sitting here laughing my head off while my roommate questions my sanity, again.
oooooooo, btw, in case you cared slash came upmy wmy women's studies class. i squeed when the teacher mentioned it, everyone looked at me like i was crazy, but slash is the best thing ever.
YAY for slash!
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From ANON - datiye on March 17, 2004
Hiya! I told you I would reveiw again. Now you'll never rid rid of me. That was a good chapter. It wasn't too short. At least I wouldn't have called it short. Well I'm glad that you updated. Gave me my fic fix. See ya next time!
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From on March 15, 2004
/I can see mouths moving, but I don�t know what is said./

Dear god, sounds like the uni lecture i was forced to sit through this morning. Twas nice to jump online and find you'd updated though, made my day despite the drakness of it all.

Will's really falling deeper and deeper huh? These conversations that he has in his head...well they're more arguments really. aren't they, well they scare the crap out of me but i love them all the same.

/I had lost interest at some point in the conversation, so I�m not positive./ find myself doing that constantly too. Is it bad that i can relate myself to Dark!Will more easily than i can with any other Will?

Anyway dude, hope writing this isn't having too much of a bad effect on you...anxiety attacks aren't good. Would REALLY like to know what's going on in Jack's mind though even if you don't make whole chapters of him. And if you're after more reviews perhaps you could consider posting this on other forums aswell? There're quite a few yahoo groups that would accept and embrace this as well as Live Journal communities if you have an LJ that is.

Please keep writing!!! *sends much motivation*

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From ANON - Datiye on March 05, 2004
Hiya! I really like your story. I would have reveiwed sooner but I just started reading it today. I think for future chapters you should stick with Will's POV. Your doing so well with it and I like his point of veiw (can you tell I have the same sort of strange thinking as you?) Anyway, I'm the type of person who loves to reveiw and you seem to like reading reveiws so I think we could have a good arangement. You write the chapters, I'll reveiw (strange thoughts and all) and we can be happy with the lovely symbiosis. ( Told you I was strange) I look foward to the next chapter.
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From on March 04, 2004
*choking back the tears* i want to hold this Will, and look into his eyes and break through that damn humming and i want him to cry!

To begin with; beautifully and evocatively written, as always.

maybe i should have added in my last review that being unable to hear over that humming is would be to me the purest form oychoychoticness without being schizo or having multiple personalities but there you go making Will all Gollum like with the whole 'for us' thing. It's getting pretty intense that i'm shaking.

Thankfully my daf suf suffering from anxiety attacks are well and truly gone, touch wood, but i'm getting so invovled that mind and body are physically remembering it...hard core dude, hard core.

But at least Will has admitted to himself...or selves as it were, that he wants it to be the way it was...i was afraid that he was too beyond caring for that...will he be rehabilitated i wonder or are they all just going to have to deal. In fact i feel that his apathy is waning...before the hum was there and all but he wasn't complaining about it but now there's that sense of begging for release coming from him and it's making the awfully large proverbial lump appear in my throat.

As for what direction you take with your format i can safely say that it won't matter to me what path you pick...i'm eager to know what Jack's thinking...are there as many things left unsaid in his mind as there are in Will's? Does he have the urge to just slap Will, take by the shoulders and just shake him in frustration or is he as patient in that noggin of his as he seems to be? But please DO finish...you've dragged me in so deep here that i need some sort of absolution!!!

Couldn't pick up on anything grammatical this time, just a few spelling issues here and there...from wat i could tell through th tears!!!!! Damn me being so empathic and emmotional!!!!

And if this review doesn't get posted properly, there may just be more tears.
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From on March 02, 2004
Grrr, it cut off the first part of my review!!!!!

what i meant to say was that firstly, there's a grammatical error in this paragraph;

/I studied the two, starting with the female. She was definitely attractive. Most of her kind started as young girls but she seemed to be rather new to this. *A run of bad luck can do that and as the age of about twenty-five, it seems that she has given up. It is sad how provocative she is trying to look, with the hopes that she will be chosen and get paid well.* As for her physical attributes, she had brown colored eyes, which matched her hazelnut hair. She was a bit on the thin side, but I know that is probably from the lack of food she is able to get. Her thin form does accentuate her other parts though, giving her a rather nice shape. I really just wanted to run my fingers through her hair./

between the asterix you changed tense which sorta read a bit weird.

Also, i sent this chapter to a close friend of mine to help me analyse what it was that draws mt ot your piece so much. Firstly we deiceded that it's because i think like what your Will thinks like so you're not alone there. Only difference being that he is a little more restrained than myself possibly in part because of his apathy.

that's about where it cut off i think...i hope...bleh, stupid techonology

-the seraph

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From ANON - roxie on March 02, 2004
Yea for the updates! I've been busy with school and haven't checked in for awhile so:

I wanted to say that in the previous chapter Will's behavior was getting increasingly irritating. If I was his friend, and knew what had happened, I'm not sure that I would be so understanding and patient with his rudeness.

Which brings me to this chapter: I am so glad Jack finally addressed the fact that Wraperaped him. I'm not quite sure if Will even understood that, but I'm glad Jack was able to confront him about it. I'm kind of wondering if the 'whores' were some sort of rape-test for Will for Jack to judge his character. (I just can't see Jack forcing anyone to do it with Will).
All in all, very thought provoking.
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From ANON - seraphina on March 02, 2004

All in all, your Will scared my friend, where as i started relating to him. Jack Sparrow does not annoy me in the slightest because i do love him so but i can imagine how it is for friends to whom i go on an on about the whole PotC slash thing when they really could care a lot less.

for example;

/�How did it go?� That grinning is incredibly oiousious./

if i felt as much contempt for the man as Will seems to in this fic, yes i would find his grin obnoxious...i would find everything ABOUT him obnoxious in fact which is why i love this next line so much;

/He winked when he said this, making me want to smack him. We can never have a straightforward conversation, can we?/

what i'm trying to say is that...well i'm not really sure what i'm trying to say...probably that your characterisation of Will is completely just and believeable and what's more, it's constant.

Also, you've put Jack in a position of ignorant naivity;

/He looked ready to hit me. �Because you aren�t yourself, Will.�

�Then why do you treat me like I am the same innocent little blacksmith you found in Port Royal?� Answer that one, Captain.

�Part of the old Will is in there somewhere. I want him back. I thought letting you do that to me would make you realize you didn�t have to be the way you are now.� His eyes softened a bit at this.

�There is no �WillWill�. There is just me.�

He kept his eyes locked with mine, �How do you know?�/

Our favourite pirate captain can't really grasp the concept that things can't always be the way he wants them, can he? An i LOVE it. Don't think i've read him like this before.

I was just reminded of something else that i loved in the last chapter and that was the descsription of the hum that Will can't shake from his head...too me it just seemed like he's reached like this perfect state of psychoticness...and by perfect, i think i mean pure...i was tyring to imagine what it was like to have to yell over a hum that no one else heard that i did not believe to be in my head...it's like sanity is skating on really REALLY thin ice and it's so terrifically horrible that it's beautiful.

which leads to me being completely in love with this;

/I restedheadhead next to the broken frame, trying to remember if I was breathing./

So from one queen of sarcasm to another, well bloody done...and that was not menat to be sarcastic in the slightest!!!

*clears throat* sorry if i rambled

-the seraph

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From ANON - ElvenEyes on March 02, 2004

*gapes*

*swoons*

(*from place on floor*) *cannot even speak so lets Jack type*

Jack: She basically wants you to know that she loves the Dark!Will...well, she loves her SexuallyCuriousAndInnocent!Will as well, but she likes your Dark!Will too.

Will: *scowls at Jack* I'm not sure I like it...

Elven: *hops up from the floor* Well, Will, you don't have to like it. We're fanfiction writers, and we write you how we want to write you, savvy?

Will: *holds up finger threateningly*

Elven: *takes a hold of Will'ngernger and growls* Don't make me break this, damn smith! You raped Jack (although I was in need of a cold drink after that! ^__^;; ), you're being a complete ass, you're going to threaten me?! I do NOT think so! *releases Will's hand*

Will: *narrows eyes* (*mutters*) Bitch...

Elven: *pointed ears perk up* Excuse me? What did you call me? Because last I checked, I was about ready to kick your ass.

Jack: *looks at the two glaring at each other with amusement*

Will: *grumbles and backs down*

Elven: *smirks* That's what I thought, mate.

I LOVED IT AND I HOPE YOU CAN UPDATE AS SOON AS POSSIBLE BECAUSE I JOINED THE RANKS OF YOUR FANS THAT BUG YOU NOW!

*coughs*

Well, maybe not as drastic as that...*grins sheepishly*

I love the story!!!!!

Elven
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