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By : GraycefulChaos

From seraphina on April 23, 2004
talk about your massive role reversal dude!!!! i LOVE it!!!!
so many things that i just adored in tpartpart...i'll try not to prattle too much but here we go;

Will annoying Jack = classic funniness!!!
Will moving closer and closer to Jack without him realising = classic funniness!!!

/�I will be referred to as Poena. You will address me as such.�
�Cheeky little thing, aren�t you?� /

lol, i'd say!!! my jaw nearly dropped when the voice just started making orders of Jack like that...too bad you can't bitch slap the voice without bitch slapping Will!!!!

/�I thought you wanted me to go to sleep.�
�Yes. In your bed.� Don�t you dare try to shove me onto the floor./

lol...i was sorta hoping Jack would try that...just for a laugh!

/There had better be some damn good fucking soon, or I�m going to have to find someone else. /

NOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!! Good things come to those who wait Will dude...so wait...don't go looking for it elsewhere!!!!

i could go on and on about almost every word that came out of Will's mouth because it enthralls me so...and as for not letting me have Will in jar...*pouts* well there's not much i can say about that really...how about if i just take him every other wed :)d :)

keep writing!!!!

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From on April 20, 2004
Hi,

I think the story is wonderful. I am now waiting breathlessly for the next pa May Maybe Will will finally be the smart-ass he is inside, outloud, that'd be too funny, I'd love to see Jack's reaction. *smiles* I hope you have some of the next chapter written, because I am hanging and wanting to read more.

Sincerely,
Sarah
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From ANON - Photis on April 14, 2004
Yep, nicely done. Very nicely done. Great story, thank you for taking the time to write and post it so that others can enjoy it.
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From ANON - roxie on April 14, 2004
Forgive me for not reviewing earlier! I have no idea what the last thing I said was, but I'm grateful that Will now knows that the voice in his head is evil and he's more or less stopped listening to it. I'm thinking that there's more going on with Jack, but as the story's not told from his point of view I'm not too sure how he feels. I can't wait for the next chapter.
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From ANON - Datiye on April 14, 2004
Yay! New chappie! Ya know,m som so glad you decided to get Will drunk. I kthatthat if he were in my possession i would want to make him drunk. And what a to eto end the chapter. You've sent my mind to a naughty place and i can only hope that you see things the same way. Can't wait to see what you have in store.
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From ANON - seraphina on April 13, 2004
/�Well, �ow much does this �urt?� Anna-Maria poked the large bruise on my stomach, causing me to cringe from the pain.

�Wonderful. Never better. It always felt like someone just impaled me with a large dinner knife.� /

oh how i LOVE his sarcasm!!!!!

/It seems to me that you are the one that needs a drink.

That, my little mind urchin, is a wonderful idea./

i sorta went 'awww, they're getting along' then 'Seraph, you're a freak...he's getting along with the voice; that's not go'

'

And Jack getting crappy with Will for being drunk...i loved the role reversal!!!

must admit that i wen 'eeep' when i first read this line: /�Who said that I�m going to wake up in the morning?�/ but then it was ok, crisis over.

/I now ha bea beta. She is Seraph. She is lurvely. If I were two sexy guy pirates, I would make sure to have a nice NC-17 scene with her. Sadly, I�m not. But I can at least right them. Well, sooner or later.

Erm, that was supposed to be a thank you. I don�t know what it turned into./

*blinks* NP dude but in the unlikely event that you do become two sexy gay pirates, i'm gonna take you up on that offer!!!!!

WONDERFUL JOB!!!!!!!...i'm going to put your Will in a jar and place him on my bookcase coz i love him so much...hope you don't mind.

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From ANON - bittersweet on April 10, 2004
*panicked screaming - a lot of it* hey! hey! you stopped! that is not good. i was so bloody into this damned good story, and you stopped! i cam and read it because i read that little deathfic on ff.net and it referred me here, and i read and become emotionally involved, and even read all your review replies...and then you stop! grrr.
i think a beta would be a good idea - not that your story sucks or anything, but you did say that people catch little tiny mistakes you make. i'd do it, but i dunno if i could be not-absorbed enough to pay attention to things like grammar and spelling. keep writing, update, and all of that.
oh yeah - thanx 2 u i don't feel so damned abnormal! i didn't realize so many girls were in love with slash.
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From ANON - Peggi on April 05, 2004
Ack! You have to update! I got hooked after the first chapter! You're a talented writer! anyway, as I said before UPDATE PLEASE! U-P-D-A-T-E-!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! PLEASE AND THANK! Pe!
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From ANON - Datiye on March 30, 2004
Hm cur curse could be good. I dunno. I think I would have to read it. Anywayz, very cool chapters. You caught me totally off guard ( but in a good way) Good job. Keep on writing.
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From ANON - serpahina on March 29, 2004
*breathing into paper bag* do you have ANY idea how much of a heartattack you gave me????? I read the title of the chapter and went NOOOOOO!!! and then the letter and oh my GOD!!!!
Poor Gena...poor WILL!!! won't that voice in his head be a barrel of laughs when he wakes up. A for a curse, i'm just a little bit worried that it would change the emphasis...like we'd move to an outside plot...but if you think you can do it whilst keeping up the style of the past chapters then go right ahead.
I find betas a must have; i mean you can read over your own work a gazillion times and miss the same error over and over again. As far as i can see you only need a few spelling glitches fixed up your grammar is fine as is style flow etc. If you feel comfortable about continuing on witout a beta, i'm pretty sure you'd get away with it...i didn't even realise you didn't have one!!! Just get someone in real life to skip over it for the spelling. eg you wrote 'could' instead of 'cold' in there somewhere.
As for 'more sterner' you're right, that's completely incorrect and basically the equiv. of a double negative because the 'er' affix means 'more'. Anyway, another great chapter! Hope you get the wonderful response on the LJ communities that you deserve!!!!!
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From ANON - Anon on March 29, 2004
AHHHH UPDATE!!! I can't wait... I really really love your Will! Anyway haha... I feel that the whole world should be gay! Not only does it help control the population, it will spread *love*... LOL ok ignore my stupid thoughts. But do update!
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From ANON - serene on March 29, 2004
I like this chapter alot... I feel that so far it's the best of all your chapters. And your fic is really unique! I like the Will you paint.
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From ANON - seraphina on March 26, 2004
*hops from foot to foot* almost forgot to give you these...my mail's down atm so i thought i'd just post 'em here;
LJ communities(pretty sure they're members only)
http://www.livejournal.com/userinfo.bml?user=pirategasm
http://www.livejournal.com/userinfo.bml?user=pirateslash
http://www.livejournal.com/userinfo.bml?user=potc_fiahooahoo groups(they're member's only so you'll have to sign up)
http://groups.yahoo.com/group/JackXWill
http://groups.yahoo.com/group/Pirate_and_Blacksmith
http://groups.yahoo.com/group/piratesofthecaribbeanslash
http://groups.yahoo.com/group/PotCSlash_JustFic

Hope that helps you out some!!!!!
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From ANON - Nephtys on March 25, 2004
I love this story so much! Will is absolutely.... realistic. (to me, atleast) I react almost exactly the same way he does. scary. -_- I agree with seraphina; parts of this story is absolutely a work of art!

Re: I wish I had been a guy so that I could be gay.
I thought i was alone in thinking that! lol, good to discover i'm not the only one with such thoughts. ^__^

Anyways. Please continue with this story as soon as you can!
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From on March 24, 2004
*Slumps on desk* Jack you are an IDIOT!!!!!!!! You didn't want to hurt him???? i'll bloody well hurt YOU in a minute. As for the voice in Will's head, i was sorta afraid for a second that it was gonna manifest itself as Will or something and push his current personality back...thank GOD it didnt...just hope Will has the strength to ignore it...i'm SURE having sex with Jack would help the cause...that is if the stupid bloody pirate captain can get over his 'not wanting to hurt will' issues. I actually like that you're drawing it out though, even if you don't know where you're going with it. Don't listen to elven about the non-alcoholic cookies...you can put alcohol in anything...i quite often have it in my morning cup of tea with a piece of toast!!!!!...maybe i shouldn't be admitting that though...ft i t i said it...more soon!!!!!
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