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Reviews for Training the new maid.

By : magnolia31
  • From ANON - Anon on April 24, 2004
    Can'it tit to see what you do with this
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  • From ANON - Unkowen on April 13, 2004

    OMG - that was soooo hot..Wow treamreams I had last night of the twins was simply amazing...*grins* Please you must update and soon! you did an amazing job for your first adult fic!
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  • From ANON - Elexies on March 21, 2004
    I'm actually quite pleased with how this story is turning out and you're a very skilled author. I thought when I first saw the summary for this story it'd be PWP, porn without plot. But I like how you've actually given a conflict to this story. I also was pleased with how Naomi wasn't the blond ditz I thought she'd be. She's a smart young woman and very crafty. I enjoy how you've seperated Twin One and Twin Two's personalities by things they prefer to do. One enjoys giving beatings, Two enjoys sitting and watching.

    One things I'm hoping for, being the pervert I am, is that One and Two will catch Naomi and hopefully tease her. I can't wait to find out what's going to happen next and I've been keeping my eye on this story for maybe a week or two, and only now have registered with Adultfanfiction.net to review this. You're an intelligent writer and definetely have a talent.

    ~Elexies
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  • From ANON - della on March 07, 2004
    YOU UPDATED!

    *runs around in happy circles*

    ....I almost feel sorry for Amber now... but at least Kina ina gets some twin love.
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  • From ANON - Akiko on February 24, 2004
    Twin smut! Twin smut! Your going great please don't stop now. When you put up the next chapter let me know I would love to read it. Please finish!!!
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  • From ANON - della on February 22, 2004
    This is really hot and all, but I wanna hear more about Naomi! Schwa!

    just a note, it takes a LOT of force with a riding crop to cut the flesh. un you you're not using it right... acrosr abr abdomen... Amber probably wouldn't be able to breathe very well for quite a while. They're really not meant to be used on people, and REALLY not to cut through skin!

    But still. hot hot hot. want more more more. pleasy?
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  • From ANON - Amber on February 20, 2004
    I don't usually review, but I just had to for this one. This story has the perfect blend of sex, action, and mystery. The heroine is more than she seems, and the portrayal of the twins is amazing. Please, keep writing, and quickly, I think I'm becoming addicted to this story. Have I mentioned I appreciate the presence of a plot? Write, please!!!
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  • From ANON - Trillian on February 19, 2004
    Not bad at all. In fact, very good. If you are actually worried about plot with this, the only thing I have to say is that the two wowen just happenio beo be out of money and prepared to fuck wealthy businessmen for the dough is a huge conincidence and a little unlikely. But I'm really enjoying this. Write more.
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  • From ANON - Court on February 18, 2004
    ok here's somthing to feed your ego...ok, as i said before i love the story line and i'm glad your adding somithing new because it was getting a little boring. What you could do is show a whole different side to the twins that you haven't shown before (hint go darker). I like your writing style becuse its not confusing and you don't jump around over much. Please keep writing, i'm really into this story and i want to know what happens next!
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  • From ANON - Alangirl on February 17, 2004
    Sigh................I am force to admit. THIS IS AWESOME!.......Eh hem. Now se dse do continue. I am getting such a kick out of your version of the twins. Your work is spectacular, and, like the twins, I amoughoughly enjoying this hunt. I is rare that authors can come up with intriguing characters like Naomi. Please continue. Your work is greatly appreciated.
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  • From ANON - Della on February 16, 2004
    Another wonderful chapter, with wonderful Twinny dialogue.

    MORE! I demand it!
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  • From ANON - della on February 09, 2004
    This is the first story I've reviewed on this site, and by far the best I've read!

    Not only is it hotliekwhoa, which it most certainly is, you've made the characters come alive! from the handful of lines that the Twins have in the movies, you've recreated their attitudes exceptionally well. I was especially pleased with their method of speach. You made it seem natural for One or Two to refer to himself in the plural, other stories I've seen that use that device seemed so impressed with their own cleverness for doing it that they overused it and ruined the story.

    And the BDSM shit rocks my socks. gotta love a pale guy with a riding crop. ^_^ Rock on!
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  • From ANON - Stormy on February 07, 2004
    Dude, great story. Are you gonna finish it?
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  • From ANON - Kgirl on February 05, 2004
    Great story- it really is a pleasant change to read a story by someone who knows how to write. Don't let a small # of reviews stop you- you'd probably have more if readers didn't have to register in order to do so! Judging by the hits your story's received so far, you've got some fans. Give us some more, please!
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  • From ANON - ChickeninaBiscuit on February 04, 2004
    You have no idea how pleased I am to find someone who 1.) has a decent understanding and application of grammar ( if you're going to write, do it right ;) and 2.) does not plagarize! Whoo! Good for you! Keep it up!
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