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From ANON - Anon on January 06, 2004
you cant leave it like that you have to put the next chapter up soon.Please.
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From ANON - Cashiel on January 06, 2004
You are just very very good. Or very very bad, if that's what you prefer... *g*
In any case, I probably don't have to spell out how much I'm liking this story.
More, please.
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From ANON - Sylvie on January 06, 2004
Keep it up! When will Will start to like Jack back? LoL I just rhymed twice in a row! Go me! :)
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From ANON - Raffie on January 06, 2004
Oh my god, wonderful!!! Better and better, really!
Yay, welcome Ana :D And I HATE Will's father! Poor little Will, I hope that Jack now could make him feel better... and not alone... *sighs*
(Ah, the photo that you posted... *dies* lol)
Can I ask you when the next update will be? O:) Thank you!
*hugs*
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From ANON - wintermoondancer on January 06, 2004
thank you, thank you. I love this fic. I'm glad you are taking the time to develop a history with Jack and Will. By the time they ..um..consumate.. their relatiop itp it ought to be really hot. I love you
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From ANON - ButterBalls on January 06, 2004
*Drools over the idea of Anamaria in vinyl and fishnets*

Whups, my secret's out :p

Yet another fantabulous chapter. You update so often it's making me feel very ashamed.

Poor Will. He just can't seem to get a break, can he?
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From ANON - valleh on January 06, 2004
omg i love it YAY!!!!!!! :) keep it comming you are soooo good at this. oh how i love au fics hehe and i can totaly sympathize with you. im blessed with not so great parents/family in general ugh. twice as worse when ur gay but hey much love to you!! and more asap:)
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From ANON - ElvenEyes on January 06, 2004

Okay, first of all, forgive me for not reviewing on the picture. (*saved it and the website*) *bows head in shame*

Second, WOW! HOLY SHIT! FUCKING AMAZING!! *gets whapped by Will and Jack*

Will: What she means to say is--

Elven: *claps hand over his mouth and interuppts* I said EXACTLY what I meant to say, William dearest. HOLY SHIT! THAT WAS WAY COOL!

Jack: *gags her*

Elven: (*muffled because of gag*) Bondage excites me, pirate. *winks in order to make Will blush*

Will: *blushes (of course)*

Jack: *grins at Elven* Is that so, elf?

Elven: (*has managed to wriggle free and undo gag*) *nods* You didn't notice my corset? Unlike Elizabeth, /I/ can actually breathe in one. *grins proudly* (VERY cute outfitw! Iw! I loved it and I have a skirt like that! *giggles*)

Will: You just like the fact that she said that Jack wanted to fiddle with your hair. *scowls*

Elven: *shrugs* Well, that too. That was fun. Poor Jack, no threesome for you!

Jack: *is too busy trying to undress Will, who keeps fidgeting and smacking his hands away, to respond* Aww, c'mon Will. I needed some lovin'! And the tempting pigtails...*waves hand at Elven, who is perched in Ana's lap*

Will: *scowls some more and moves to the other side of Elven and Ana* Stop...

Jack: But WHY!?

Will: *huffs* Because you were checking out her -(*points to Elven, who shrugs*)- AND you let her -(*points to Anamaria, who is feeling up Elven*)- molest me! *scowls*

Jack: You're not interested in just a LITTLE bit of action, Will?

Elven: If I may so bold as to inject my professional opinion, -(*Will glares, and Jack mumbles "Tha's /my/ line...why do they keep using me lines?"*)- It was a an excellent chapter, Jack didn't get with me and Ana, because, like I said, I wanted Ana to me onesies, and you, Will, are now forced to be with the one person who really, actually cares for you. *points to Jack*

Jack: You know what, you should introduce her to Seraphina.

Elven: *confused* Ana?

Jack: *shakes head* No, the author.

Elven: *shrugs* Maybe. (*turns to you*) You have MSN or Windows messenger? If you do, just add me address (*points to email*) and I'll talk to you sometime, savvy?

Will: Why are you two ignoring me?

Jack: *look surprised* Now, how could we ignore you?

Elven: You're dressed so adorably! *motions to the bondage-y outfit he's still wearing*

Jack: *snickers*

Will: *looks mortified and scowls* (*mumbling*) Well, /you're/ still dressed up too, Elven...*scowls some more and pulls at shirt to cover his stomach*

Elven: *looks down at corset, skirt and boots* Hey, whelp, I like it. *twirls and then grins, revealing the fangs*

Jack: *cups her chin and pries open her mouth to look at the teeth* Damn, those are sharp...

Will: *keeps his mouth shut and swats away Jack's hands when he tries to do the same to him* Shtop you!

Elven: *giggles at Will* You need to speak with them! You slur, lad!

Jack: *laughs as Will scowls*

Elven: *stretches* Well! I'm going to go. *grabs Ana and goes to other room*

Jack: *eyes widen*

Will: *jaw drops*

Jack: *cs Wis Will's teeth since his mouth is open*

Will: *snaps mouth shut and scowls when he realizes that Jack is getting ideas* Don't even think about it, pirate.

Jack: *smirks and grabs Will around the waist, dumping him on the bed* I make the rules around here, whelp.

Will: *watches as Jack fiddles with his boots* Eep!

Elven: *comes back in* Boys, you need to take it to another room! Don't just stand there and embarrass poor Will in front of the author! Oh, and by the way...

...I loved it! The chapter was loverly and you don't disappoint! I hope you update soon so I can watch the slashy goodness between me boys!

*watches Jack hoist Will onto his shoulder and disappear into the room that Ana is in, while Will blushes violently*

Well, I'm sorry, I must be going. So if you'll excuse me, I have voyeuristic tendecies. *raises eyebrows andrts rts to run into room*

I email you soon! *grins and disappears into room*

Elven

P.S. I hope this was amusing. I like doing these! *giggles*
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From ANON - hatorisohma on January 05, 2004
Gah! I miss going out all gothed up. This chapter is making me nostalgic, its been so long. Love the Orli in goth gear. It's killing me in fact just imagining the prettiness. Nice chapter overall, as well. I'm liking this story very much thus far. Keep up the goth- er, I mean good work.
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From ANON - someweirdchick on January 04, 2004
I hate you, you know that? I got all excited because I thought you updated... But NNOOOO!!!!! you had to post the dumb pic! (which I loved and saved!).......... No! I didn't mean it!!!! Forgive me!!!!! *kisses your feet*

I have seen him in that outfit before, I'm so pissed at myself that I didn't think of it when you were describing Will in the 'rejected vampire' wardrobe. Oh well, memories suck. Good luck with your laptop and disk and computer gods. We all need luck in that DEPPartment. (Sorry, couldn't help it. :P)
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From ANON - wintermoondancer on January 03, 2004
thanks. that's an awesome site. Happy New Year!!!! Look forward to your next offerings!
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From ANON - Cashiel on January 03, 2004
Love it. Love you. Write more. Soon.
Now I can't stop picturing Will in that outfit. Poor me...
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From ANON - ElvenEyes (again) on January 03, 2004

Elven: Okay, YES I'm reviewing again, and it's because I love the story!

Jack: *rolls eyes* You know, she -(*points to Elven*)- won't tell you so I guess I'll have to. She wants to--*gets tackled by Elven and a hand clapped over her mouth* Mmph!

Elven: I'll not have you tell the author! *shakes finger at him*

Will: *sighs exasperatedly* Would you mind if I told the author? I wouldn't...let's say...'spin any unnecessary elaborate details into it'?

Elven: *frowns* I'm not sure I want anyone to tell the author. It's kind of embarrassing...*scraches head sheepishly*

Will: *pats her back comfortingly* Are you sure?

Elven: *sighs* Fine. Go ahead and tell them, but do you mind if I leave first?

Will: *shakes head* Not at all. Go on.

Elven: *bows and leaves the room, first snatching Jack by the collar and dragging him to the other room with her*

Will: Okay, what she wanted to say is that she (Elven) would probably be in one of those fetish clubs like that which you have written, or are getting ready to write. What I'm trying to say is that it might be humorous to see her in one, but I'm not sure why. It just strikes me as funny for Will in your story to see someone like her (not normal, and freakishly outgoing), someone that seems to find his situation amusing, in a club like that. Don't ask, it is a very morbid humor that Elven finds in this.

(*you hear from other room Elven shouting "Damn pirate! You'll become one of the eunuchs you're always making fun of! Don't touch my rum!"*)

Will: O__o? Okay...anyways...She wants to know if you'd write her into your story--

-(*hear from other room Elven shouting "/AMAZING/ STORY! /INCREDIBLE/ STORY! Damnit! Get it right, WHELP!"*)-

Will: *grumbles* Anyways, dress her up any way you like if you'd be so kind as to put her in the story, but she wants at least knee high bondage-y bo Fan Fangs, collars, makeup, whatever you want, she's all for it. *thinks* Let's see...she's got straight red hair, grey/green eyes, and fair skin, I guess. And, she's *actually* as outgoing as Jack from the movie.

-(*hear Elven grumbling from other room*)-

Will: *glares at door* Stop you're pouting, wench!

-(*hear Jack saying "Tha's MY line, whelp!"*)-

Will: *shouts back at the other two in the room* Stop calling me that! *pouts* You guys suck so much...

-(*Jack snickers and Elven mutters "I know Jack certainly does."*)-

Will: *scowls some more* I'm not going to say anymore about this writing in a character for a the next chapter anymore, Elven!

Elven: *appears in the door and sticks out her tongue anime-style*

Will: *rubs temples as Elven disappears into the other room again* Bloody surrounded by them...

Toodles!

P.S. Will: It's just a suggestion...*Will gets whapped by Elven* Okay, she's asking outright *gets whapped again* Damnit, wench! *sighs* Fine, she's 'gotten down on her knees and asking -(*stops another pillow hitting him*)- /begging/ to be in the club. *snatches pillow from Elven and throws it at her* Stop doing that! I was trying to talk!

Ta!

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From ANON - ElvenEyes on January 02, 2004

*squees*

Please update soon! I lurve it so much, and that outfit on Will was making me drool. I LOVE bondage boots; they're so much fun! Buckles, and lace up...*drools some more* He sounded so hot! And you got a bit of slashy Jack/Will goodness, even if it was just Jack's imagination.

Jack: *hangs head*

Elven: Why don't you just TELL him how you feel, pirate?

Will: Well, we're not talking about YOUR story, Elven, we're talking about THIS story.

Elven: *shrugs* So, you want me to call him 'biker'?

Jack: *whaps them both with pillows*

Elven: *scowls* I'm not sure I deserved that!

Jack: Tha's MY line, lass!

Will: *shrugs* Oh, Jaaaack!
lvenlven: *smirks as Will trails his fingers over Jack's chest*

Jack: *growls* Now's not a time to tempt me, whelp...

Elven: Jaaack?

Jack: Can't any of you say me bloody name right?! Why are you all drawling?

Will: Cause it's amusing to hear you all hot and bothered.

Elven: You know that Barbossa says it like that, too.

Will: *giggles and then gets tackled by Jack onto the couch*

Elven: *rolls eyes* Completely hopeless...*sighs*

Anyways, I hope you update REALLY soon, and hopefully some SLASHY ACTION BETWEEN JACK AND WILL?!

Ta!

Elven
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From ANON - someweirdchick on January 02, 2004
AH! After that discription, Orlando SHOULD play a gay rejected vampire! That would be so hilarious and cute. This chapter was great, and I love the 'Edward Scissorhands' reference. (I love that movie!) New chapter please!!!
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