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By : lostmarbles

From ANON - dr. robinson =^.^= on October 22, 2004
yay! this was the 1st POTC fanfic i read *and my 1st time of actually reviewing*, and it's still one of my favs! (i also lurve ur "price of rum" fic)

so glad u finally updated~
and i absolutely cannot wait for norrington to get will!! i'm expecting to be sorta like barbossa from the price of rum.. which was amasing. your writing is very good, but i think you could heighten the intesity (or suspense..?) even more by going into more depth when describing will's physical pain. in my opinion, i think details of physical pain would be able to create much more pathos for our beloved protagonist~ well, it was just a thought/suggestion, but what you're doing now i completely fine by me. i suppose i'm only saying this because i lurrrve reading about rape and torture..

that's all! i hope this review encourages you to post chapter 29 faster~
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From ANON - Rutaari on October 21, 2004
YOU FINALLY UPDATED!!!!! *Happy Dance* YAY! Super-Jack to the rescue! I can't wait for more of this! I really can't! Please update soon! Though I understand the "unable to write" bit. 'fraid I've lost a few muses to a few stories of my own. But PLEASE don't lose this one! *pouts* Please?
Rutaari
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From ANON - Yanic on October 18, 2004
Mas por favor!
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From ANON - mikky on September 12, 2004
Alright i'll admit....for a long time i didn't read this b/c the intro sounded dumb but now i must admit.......I'm ADDICTED.
Okay..... I CAN'T TAKE IT ANYMORE..... Paleeeez give me more, i need more. I love this story i must read more pleez it is so good. I love the charecters, wasnt keen on the setting at first but now its grown on me.

'`*~YOU RULE~*`'
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From ButtonsXRasin on September 05, 2004
OMG. DUDE. I LOVE YOUR FIC. WRITE MORE. o__o!!! PLEASE. LOVE. LOVE. LOVE.
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From ANON - Di AKA 1/2 of the PKmaniacs on August 23, 2004
dont wanna review now...but i have to go to bed, so i might as well. smut level is definetly doing very well. wouldve loved for you to...elaborate...on the last scene...but i'll survive. love the clerks coming back, even though they're a little stupidly silly, they're funny. the tub thing was a little pretty woman. jack is starting in he mhe melodrama as well, and he is still softer than i would like...but i will forgive you, as these both work well in your story. anyways, i still love your story. not just the smut, thedlindling and sentiments make me melt a little. am glad that will isnt as moralistic as before, although i doubt he would ever be anything close to jack...unfortunately. i swear, someday i am going to fall for a thief...if i dont just become one hehe. anyways...i gotta go now. this one person is ignoring me right now...and i would really prefer it if he wouldnt ignore me, considering my hidden feelings for him...so now i am so severely bummed i have forgotten the review i had planned. so i'll read up some more later, good job, and easy on the mush, eh?

~Remember, stealing is a crime when you get caught~
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From ANON - Lillia AKA 1/2 of PKmaniacs on August 21, 2004
finally they get to it! that was an awesome sex scene, man. your writing is very well done. damn norrington. and stupid gibbs...why does everyone make gibbs evil in AUs or crossovers? underappreciated character...oh well. ana seems a little...ooc and soft...but what the hell, its an AU, right? other than that, good job. funny bringing back the crazy clerks...just tell that billeh dude to keep away from jack grr...although i dont blame the girl, i prolly wouldnt have had the guts to squeeze his ass, but i admrie her for it...i know Di would do it haha. dont know when Di is gonna review for you. i am no longer at her house, which is good because i can read this at my own pace now. damn Di reads slow! i was sitting tehre like "scroll down! scroll down, now Di! i need more!" haha. anyways, poor jack, hurt his side! thats so bad...but at least he's a real man about it. will was really good during the tornado part. showed he was like brave and smart and shit. duct tape, 101 uses. i love that stuff. but he was very resourceful in that part...not very good w/motorcycles, but smart nonetheless. anyway, i would read more of this tonight, but i have to get to bed, damn the necesity of sleep! oh and that hotel room is SWEET! i've stayed in anything nicer than a Days Inn...but i imagine they're that nice. except w/valet parking..i'd never trust those penguins, though. that would be the perfect cover for stealing a car...hmm...nah, i'll leave that to Di. anyways, awesome job and i'll read some more manana.

~Remember, fire is dangerous to those who dont play with it all the time~
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From ANON - Lillia AKA other half of the PKmaniacs on August 20, 2004
haha sorry about Di. she can be a little harsh sometimes, but believe me, she's said a lot worse in other reviews. anyways, i love this story. i agree with Di in a way...Will is sort of piling on the melodrama a bit much...but i want to see the explanation for 'killing' his parents in future chapters before i get all huffy about it. he's also a bit of a baby...but he is a spoiled, rich kid...and besides, it makes me giggle a lot, so i like it. anyways, this story was anything but what i expected. i guess what i actually expected, before i even read one word was: jack kidnaps will, will is rich brat, will falls for jack bc jack is dangerous and hot, or some shit like that. but WOW did you surprise me. the way this was written was very, very well done. things are delivered very well, and although i usually dislike when characters are made too soft, i personally have enjoyed jack's kinder side, probably because its never completely soft and fuzzy, and it took a long time to develop. it was done very realistically. the only thing that disapoints me is the fact that will doesnt take to crime, disapoints Di as well, but i guess we cant expect someone to give up their morals and start stealing. haha. anyways, the hot topic scene was great. i've actually only been in that store one time...its not my fault though! i cant drive yet, my friends have all been in it so many times they've lost intereand and whenever i go to the mall with my mom or sister, i start going in that store when either my mom or lyd grabs my arm and starts dragging me away...sometimes i feel like screaming for the security guard, but i know if i do i'll get the crap beaten out of me when i get home haha. oh well *sighs and mourns over horribly boring clothes forced to buy* its okay, Di gets me some stuff sometimes. anyways, liz/ana is great. ana seems a little soft over liz...but its so rare i can find femslash mixed in so naturally, i cant really diss it much. and of course the jack/will is awesome. whole reason i'm here lol. the slow pace it took for them to start feeling for each other, not just jack lusting, was done very well. although just lust is always good in my opinion, this was done very well because it shows jack has a heart, black as it may be (dont get me wrong, i love the blackhearts), and that will could not just automatically fall for him, like it happens in so many other fics. oh, plus a good amount of smut. love the smut. written very well. speaking of that, Di is screaming at me to hurry up bc she wants to get back to reading more of that lol. so i'll review sometime later. great job so far...must read more now.

~Remember, fire is dangerous to those who dont play with it all the time~

Lillia AKA Pyromaniac
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From ANON - Di AKA 1/2 of the PKmaniacs on August 20, 2004
he killed his parents too? God, are you ever going to stop with the melodrama? i mean, its like the girl from gremlins 2, you know the one whose every holiday is ruined because of some tragedy in her childhood. dont get me wrong, i do love this story. it was just when i read that 'i killed them' part i felt like smacking my forehead, groaning, puking, and laughing all at the same time. ugh. anyways, just to let you know, even with will being a constant, and everworsening drama queen, i do love this story. have been reading it since last night. i havent reviewed yet, because i am lazy, but i couldnt hold out that long. in so many parts its had me in stitches, laughing my head off...i'm not sure if every time it was MeanT to be funny...but i'm like that. i love will's new wardrobe. glad he isnt shopping at old navy anymore (shivers). also loved the characters at hot topic. anyways, i have to go now because the other half of the PKmaniacs is currently at my house, and i think she wants to review too. i'll review in a few chapters, so later.
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From ANON - Anon on August 16, 2004
This is by far the *best* slash fic i've read, whether you're writing it drunk or not...
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From ANON - Butterballs on August 07, 2004
Can't believe it took me this long to read this chapter...but as I said, I never visit the PotC fandom anymore except for a few fics I started reading before the fandom all went to shit.

Man, this is really not Will's year, lol! Jack's adorable in his possessiveness, Norri makes Barbossa look like a pussycat, and as for Liz's revenge: could NOT have been more perfect! Everything works in fandom, let's face it. I'm desperate for the Norri/Will...and you'd so make my week if Will could even enjo a b a bit. *snerk*
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From ANON - Patroclus on July 28, 2004
I loooooove your story. Some of that is because of my wierd need to see Orli with hot guys but a lot of that is because you are a good writer. Also I do read authors's note and I may be one of the few who do not want to see N/W non-con. Maybe some major groping but not the whole act. I may be imature but nobody ever told me I had to be mature so PLEEEEASE no rape. Great Story
Patty
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From ANON - Rutaari on July 28, 2004
*sigh* I love you, doll, but you have GOT to stop leaving me like this and making me wait for EVER for a chappie! Are we gonna see some Willy bashing? *wink wink* Love ya, girlie.
Rutaari
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From ANON - cat on July 23, 2004
Great story im just re reading it againn, but the link to the photo

http://www.fakin-reality.net/bloomtastic/photos/theface03aug7.jpg

dosent seem to work.

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From ANON - Amber on July 15, 2004
Damn you woman! This is really good! I just...wow. Yeah. I really really really want you to update this!! lol.
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