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Reviews for Happily Ever After

By : Moonshade
  • From ANON - Maria on September 27, 2003
    I like it slowly, slow is good. I´mean you can write a Jack Will story in two sentences: "Will go after Jack. Jack will be a pirate. Both fall deeply in love and fuck" o.k. there were three sentencest wht where is the fun? I love slow, take your time!
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  • From ANON - ButterBalls on September 26, 2003
    For a virgin lemon writer, you're doing very well. Don't stop here! I can sympathise with your apprehension...I remember, when I wavirgvirgin slasher...*goes all nostalgic* Actually, no, I can't remember a terrible lot, except that I was dead scared of writing the smut. But it comes naturally in the end...sort of...with experience, I suppose :p
    Anywho, it's a good plotbunny, and I look forward to reading more :D
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  • From on September 26, 2003
    GURGLYTOFLELERFLENESS! WRITE MOREEEEEE!!!!!
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  • From ANON - wintermoondancer on September 26, 2003
    Great start - keep going, please.
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  • From ANON - Angel on September 26, 2003
    '...penetrating something in Will, that had remained, up until this point un-penatrated.' Caught that one. *grins* Dunno if it was :meant: to be a pun or not, but gave me a bit of a chuckle nonetheless. Right, that was very... Hrm... Very much like dangling the key to a prison cell before a condemned man, and then giggling and skipping away with it instead. Tease. And as you said that reviews will in effect make you drop everything and write more, here it is. A nice little tidbit. Which of course leaves me wanting more, darn you, and no doubt that was the intent. I'd like to see where this all is going. Will seems terribly befuddled. Which makes sense. And it's amusing to watch him gape like a fish whenever Jack walks in and speaks as though he should know what's going on. *g* Lovely ::holds up a flask of rum, then pulls it away with a grin:: Oops, I can tease too. ;)
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  • From ANON - DarkBubbleGum on September 26, 2003
    Wow, you update fast!
    I had two chapters to read. Thanks so much..but..
    I WANT SLASHY GOODNESS!
    PLEASE!
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  • From ANON - Purple Mist on September 26, 2003
    Love your name.^_~ Hope you write more soon and have Captain Jack cheer up Will. Nothing a little rum and some seduction on Jack's part that won't fix, savvy?
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  • From ANON - Demoniclittlegirl on September 26, 2003
    Update..Update now!
    Love how Will is in turmoil over his feelings. ANd how Jack is being so damn stubborn!
    Great fic.
    NOW UPDATE!

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  • From ANON - Earen on September 26, 2003
    CONTINUE! *dies* I must read more! Kyute so far!


    Earen
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  • From ANON - Maria on September 26, 2003
    Yes, you can write. And because there are millions of people out there, who can´t, I ´m begging you: Write more! Write now! I´m more than happy to read it.
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  • From ANON - Cherry on September 25, 2003
    I love it. It is a wonderful story so far. Uber cute, yes, but if the next chapter doesn't come out soon, I shall impale your royal authoressness upon my beloved Sporkof Doom. lol. May you never be lacking in pixie-stix, and have a Depplicious day!
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  • From ANON - NieniSprings on September 25, 2003
    I likes it..... I yao yaoi! The whole getting grabbed around the waist part in the first chapter was vury well written. Gme ame a little twinge in my stomach. XD
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  • From ANON - Angel on September 25, 2003
    Ah, but if the story is well written, one doesn't notice that it's 'slow'. PWP is fine, but the build-up, the explanation, is lovely too. I like your characterization of Jack. It still amuses me that Will can't swim, and can't get away to carry out his threat of leaving Jack. Poor Will. He's just so much fun to abuse.
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  • From ANON - Anon on September 25, 2003
    Ah, but if the story is well written, one doesn't notice that it's 'slow'. PWP is fine, but the build-up, the explanation, is lovely too. I like your characterization of Jack. It still amuses me that Will can't swim, and can't get away to carry out his threat of leaving Jack. Poor Will. He's just so much fun to abuse.
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  • From ANON - Edward Unwhai Silverfang on September 25, 2003
    Once more, very good, your grammar and spelling like we said last time is very good, though you made one mistake I noticed:

    "Jack, I have to get back to her! I can just leave her!" I think you mean can't.

    But besides that, everything in that respect is perfect. Though there is something starting to bother me, and easily explainable if you look at it the way I think your writing it, but I would like to hear your specific explanation, if you don't mind, lol.

    You have William out of character in this, he wouldn't sit down and cry, at least not somewhere he could be fo but but as I had said earlier, this might be because he's so confused, seeing as he's been a little off kilter from the start of your story. Maybe he'll even out to normal soon.
    -Edward Unwhai Silverfang
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