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Reviews for The Haunting Place

By : Lktwoozee
  • From ANON - Maggie1956 on June 13, 2005
    50 chapters??? I pass up MOST stories that run long, most of them seem to be prattlesome Mary Sues with thin plots and absurdly non-canonical characterizations and tiresome dialogue and sex scenes more suited to a cheap porn movie than to a coupling where I want to see passion of epic proportions and maybe even True Love. Most, but not all. If it rates a lot of stars, I'll at least skim the first chapter. Some of them are worth wading through as many as a dozen chapters if there's enough wit sprinkled in and the Mary Sue isn't so sweet as to induce a diabetic coma. Your story isn't one of those. Not at all. Your story is delightful, suspenseful, comical, lustful, and the loving is sweetened with just the right amount of honey to make it delicious rather than icky. Hehehe...did I have you in suspense there? I'm a writer, too.

    I opened the first chapter of The Haunting Place long ago, prepared to skim. I didn't skim. I savored every well-turned phrase, giggled at the humor (LOVE the word-play w/ Maren & her transparent trollop!), grinned at the courtship dance where Jack pursued Maren until she caught him, gasped at the horror (most horrific scene - Jack morphing into a corpse while making out with Maren), and...I could go on, but let's just say I LOVE this story. I wait months to check your progress so I can joyfully binge on several chapters, then curse like a pirate when I come to the end of them.

    Maren isn't, strictly speaking, a Mary Sue. Yes, the reader easily slips into her role and I'm sure the author does as well...but that's what a good heroine is for. A bonafide Mary Sue would be annoyingly perfect, would instantly entrance every male she encounters, and would make everyone act horribly out of character. Maren is someone who could conceivably be a character in a future PotC movie. She's 3-dimensional, as is her friend the dead doxie, and if I knew them we'd be friends. Which means I enjoy spending time with them so much that 50 chapters sounds just dandy.

    Woman, you should be writing bodice rippers. GOOD bodice rippers. I used to read bodice ripping romances a lot, until I became a more discriminating reader and found that very few authors did that "Historical Romance, Rogueish Hero, demure maiden who will readily become a one-man-wanton" with a style and wit that satisfied my fantasy needs without writing so badly that I was distracted from the story and/or disliked the main characters for being arrogant, petulant control freaks who've mistaken pathological jealousy for True Love. You might seriously consider taking some of the work you've done in this story and crafting a pirate story with all original characters. Sure, people would read it and say, "He's like Jack Sparrow." But Jack Sparrow is an archetype, like Robin Hood, and if you change enough stuff it won't be plagiarism. I think your work is quite sellable.

    I also want to say that in all the years I've been reading AFF, this is the FIRST time I've felt moved enough to actually write a review. I've thought about it before (incl. previous chapters of this story) but never got around to it. I'm a tough critic and a world-class procrastinator, and I say this so you'll know this review means I REALLY like your work. Do more!!!

    Maggie


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  • From ANON - Peachychic on June 13, 2005
    You never cease to amaze me. I did notice when they removed your fic from fanfiction.net, and I was pissed! They removed my all-time fave story a few years back and I will never forgive them. I guess you were just too hot to handle ; P. Anywho, I'm thrilled that you made the modifications and have continued with the story. Needless to say, I will be reading the updates from here, but I still receive e-mail notification from ff.net, which is great. Can't wait for the next installment of Cap'n Jack goodness!

    ~Peachychic AKA Renegadewriter AKA Michelle
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  • From ANON - Anni on June 02, 2005
    Morty, huh? 'Undercover Blues'? Glad you're back!
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  • From ANON - Anni on June 02, 2005
    Well, welcome back! Thought perhaps ye'd died! I haven't even read it yet, just wanted t'say ye were missed! Now, I go back t'read ....
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  • From ANON - katie on May 22, 2005
    OH thank God you've updated!! I was beginning to get a bit angsty there.
    Bloody love this story!! YESSSS!
    A swig of rum and a pinch of yer bum.
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  • From ANON - Fleur on May 22, 2005
    brilliant as always darling
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  • From ANON - IrishLassie78 on May 17, 2005
    I'm so glad I found this story again. I can't believe that "other" site deleted it. They allow some of the most ridiculous crap to be posted, and they delete excellent works of fiction because they're ,shall we say, a little racy. It's just unbelievably stupid... If you don't like smut, don't fucking read it. I don't understand what's so hard about that. Anyway, this story is excellent. I love your Jack, he's so true to character. And Maren and Kristy are fabulous. I loved this chapter especially because, like Jack, I enjoy outsmarting people who think they are outsmarting me. Nothing like hustling a hustler. Glad to see you're posting again. Can't wait to see what happens next.
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  • From ANON - Chelsey on May 15, 2005
    Citadel!!! You're back me lovely! Oh how I've missed your humor. I do have an interesting story to go with yours...As soon as I started reading this chapter and Maren came in, I knew what was going on! I knew only because I'd used the exact same cheating methods with my boyfriend when he first started playing Black Jack! Oh those were some good times! Anywho, please do check your email I'll be sending you a wonderful picture of myself and Justin (my boyfriend) from prom. Trust me you'll LOVE this! Update soon my dear!

    -Chels- AKA: HisBeautiful

    chapter 3 of Belle Rosa should be up soon!
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  • From ANON - Sparrows Lass on May 15, 2005
    Can't belive this was deleted from the other place. I knew it was here and just re-read it the other day and was soooooo excited to find another chapter up. Please update soon. This has to one of the best stories out there.
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  • From ANON - Hils on May 15, 2005
    Yay! Found you! About bloody time - and only thanks to Ani kicking me in the right direction!

    You know my response - as ever... need more!

    I'm addicted to this!

    Ta!
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  • From ANON - ani sparrow on May 15, 2005
    Woo-flippin'-hoo! I wondered where you had got to. Why were you deleted, fer gawd's sake?

    A wonderful chapter to read at 9.30am on a Sunday morning - you are a veritable genuis!
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  • From ANON - MarzBar on May 14, 2005
    ROTFLMAO!! Loved the gambling and cheating and petting at the table. Great writing! More soon please.
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  • From ANON - Killer Kadoogan on May 14, 2005
    Hurray! I am sooo happy to hear from you again! What a great chappie! Why anyone would delete your wonderful story is beyond me! Update as soon as possible, dearie. As always I will be anxiously awaiting more adventures with Jack and Maren. Happy writing from your happy reader! Tengo que irme! Salud! Killer K :)
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  • From ANON - Fearn on May 14, 2005
    YAY!!!! I think I read it four times... Man I missed you!
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  • From ANON - InuYasha\'s Girl on May 10, 2005
    are you still gonna continue this story
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